if the structure and reasons are all correct, then we need to pay attention to the content. How to develop the content better. One of the most important features is 'coherence'. However, it is not so coherent in the reasons. For example, in your second reason, it is about friendship, but it doesn't stick to friendship exactly. The correct pattern for coherence is:
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if the structure and reasons are all correct, then we need to pay attention to the content. How to develop the content better. One of the most important features is 'coherence'. However, it is not so coherent in the reasons. For example, in your second reason, it is about friendship, but it doesn't stick to friendship exactly. The correct pattern for coherence is:
First, reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1 (some arguments. 1-2 sentence) + advantages of reason 1( 1-2 sentence). // about 20 seconds
Second, reason 2 (1 sentence) + why reason 2 (some arguments. 1-2 sentence) + advantages of reason 2 ( 1-2 sentence). // about 20 seconds