Average House Prices
The bar chart compares and contrasts the changes of house prices in five distinct cities measured in percentage change from 1989 prices in a 12 year period, from 1990 to 2002.
Generally speaking, the average house prices increased in all cities except in which of Frankfurt, a German city, from the 1990 - 1995 to 1995 - 2002 time period.
Looking at New York, Madrid, Tokyo and London, the house prices in New York and London displayed drastic inclines from -5% to 5% and from -7% in 1990 - 1995 average to 12% in 1995 - 2002 average respectively.
On the other hand, in years of 1990 to 2002, minor growths can be seen in the house prices in “Madrid” and “Tokyo”. Though the overall rises are similar in both countries, the house price in 1989 in the former was lower than the 1990 - 1995 average price as well as 1995 - 2002 average price. By contrast, which of the latter was higher than the same average prices.
flaws:
The price in Frankfurt increased too in 1990 - 1995.
Though the overall rises are similar in both countries, the house price in 1989 in the former was lower than the 1990 - 1995 average price as well as 1995 - 2002 average price. By contrast, which of the latter was higher than the same average prices.
Description: don't use 'former' and 'latter' in a long sentence.
read a good sample:
http://www.testbig.com/ielts-writing-task-i-essays/chart-below-shows-in…
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 10
No. of Words: 163 200
No. of Characters: 713 1000
No. of Different Words: 80 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.573 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.374 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.114 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 47 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 26 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 14 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 8 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.668 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.543 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.81 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.185 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4