The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year.Write a short report for a university lecturer describing th

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The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of jeans for two companies next year in Turkey. The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in jeans at the end of next year.

Write a short report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

Write at least 150 words.

Model Answer 1:

The bar chart shows the predicted sales of jeans in thousands of pairs for two companies in Turkey; Mango Co. and Jack & Jones Co. for next year.

The most striking feature is that sales will increase for both companies, It is anticipated that sales of Jack & Jones Co. will start at 450,000 pairs in January decreasing by 200,000 pairs following month with a gradual recover over the subsequent four months reaching 400,000 pairs in June. Those of Jack & Jones Co. are predicted to be stable until August peaking up to 600,000 pairs in September and October.

Sales of Jack & Jones will reach a peak of 900,000 in December, For those of Mango Co. is forecasted a gradual increase with the largest sale of 600,000 pairs in December. In the beginning of the next year those of Mango Co. will stand at 150,000 pairs falling back to 100,000 pairs in February, rising steadily to 250,000 in June, In subsequent months sales will reach 450,000 pairs increasing to 500,000 pairs in August, staying stable until November,

Regarding the pie chart the sales of Jack & Jones Co. will share 30% of market whereas those of Mango Co. 20%. 50% of market is set to be shared by other companies.

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Sentence: In the beginning of the next year those of Mango Co. will stand at 150,000 pairs falling back to 100,000 pairs in February, rising steadily to 250,000 in June,

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 206 200
No. of Characters: 946 1000
No. of Different Words: 101 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.788 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.592 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.287 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 58 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 47 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 25 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 16 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.782 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.143 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.537 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.793 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.196 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4