The chart bellow shows the amount of money per week spent on fast foods in Britain. The graph shows the trends in consumption of fast food.
Write a report and describing the information shown below.
You should write at least 150 words.
Both of the graphs reveal the data about unhealthy foods in United Kingdom. The bar chart presents every Britain person who spends pence on junk foods per week by three different groups; even though, the line chart gives the information about the total grams of fast food consumption throughout 20 years.
Overall, while the hamburgers are the most favorite unhealthy food which are consumed by high income and average income earners; low income group preferring chooses fish and chips as the best choice of junk food. In any case, the total grams of hamburgers and pizzas increase gradually during the period; while, the amount of fish and chips show a fluctuation throughout the period and then show an upward trend in the last period.
Every British citizen, who is grouped in the high income, spends approximately 40 pence per a week to buy hamburgers and spend money a half of the total amount of favorite food to buy the other junk foods. The average income earners spend 33 pence per person per week, followed by fish and chips at 24 pence, then pizza at 11 pence. Group of lower community is apparently spending 18 pence to buy fish and co, while it only spends under five-teen pence to buy two others.
In the same case, hamburgers and pizza show an upward trend from the beginning period to 1983, and then doubled in the last period. The highest trend of Fish and co is 300 grams in 1985 prior to fluctuate during the period and then drop to 240 grams in 1990.
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about 6.5 in 9. Remember no
about 6.5 in 9.
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The bar chart presents every Britain person spends pence on junk foods per week
The bar chart presents every Britain person who spends pence on junk foods per week
food which those consumed by high income and average income earners
food which are consumed by high income and average income earners
Every British citizen, who grouped in the high income, spend approximately 40 pence
Every British citizen, who is grouped in the high income, spends approximately 40 pence
The average income earners spending 33 pence per person per week
The average income earners spend 33 pence per person per week
Group of lower community is apparent spending 18 pence
Group of lower community is apparently spending 18 pence
In same case
In the same case
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