The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

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The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below

The two graphs illustrate the number of Japanese Tourist who visited foreign lands from the year 1985 to 19995 and the percentage of it visiting Australia in the same time period.

There were 5 million Japanese tourists in 1985 , 2 percent of which chose Australia. The number of tourists kept increasing at the rate of 1 million per year until the year 1988. The Australian share of it also saw a steady increase till the same year.

The year 1989 saw a drop in the Australian share by 1 percent but the overall number of Japanese tourists kept increasing up until the year 1995 with the only exception being the year 1991 where it saw a slight decline in the numbers. The Australian share also saw a steady rise until the year 1994 ending with a slight decline in the year 1995.

The overall trends shown in the graph have been rising ones.

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flaws:
No. of Words: 153 200

Not so well organized. Better: one paragraph for one graph only.

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 153 200
No. of Characters: 678 1000
No. of Different Words: 78 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.517 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.431 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.272 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 42 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 30 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 18 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 10 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.895 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.429 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.521 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.798 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.211 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4