The diagram below shows the average growth in domestic product in wealth countries countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not

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The diagram below shows the average growth in domestic product in wealth countries; countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not.

The bar chart demonstrates the average annual GDP in three different types of countries in four decades between 1960 and 2000.

In the 1960s, wealthy countries had the hugest amount of GDP which was just under 5% and with the passage of time this figure declined dramatically to 1.5 per cent in the 1990s. Interestingly enough, the GDP for some countries that applied a global method for their business had a steady growth which its amount was about one and a half per cent in the 1960s and by 2000 this figure had reached to one out of twenty.

Nevertheless, some countries which did not use any global procedure had an unstable trend since in the 1960s the GDP was about 2.5% and experienced a rise and decline in the two further decades and ultimately, stood at 1.5% in the 1990s.

Overall, unlike to wealthy countries, some which used global methods had a upward trend for their average annual GDP and this trend for some that did not apply global approaches was no stable.

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flaws:
Don't use math in task I like: 'had reached to one out of twenty.'

wrong: 'the GDP for some countries that applied a global method for their business'
correct: Globalisers

wrong: 'some countries which did not use any global procedure'
correct: non-Globalisers

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