The figure shows the result of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries the participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people

Essay topics:

The figure shows the result of a survey of 1000 adolescents in five different countries. the participants were asked at what age they believed certain rights and responsibilities should be granted to young people.

The multiple bar char compares the different opinion of adolescent from five countries related to their legal age to assume three types of rights and responsabilities.

The americans and britoin believe that from eighteen –years old have the right to married. Conversely, Mexican and Egyptian agreed that sixteen years old represent the best age to married. Unlike those countries japanesse adolescent believe that twenty-three years old is the right age to married.

Another noticeable numbers were relate to which age represent their first national elections where United Kingdom and Mexico young adults agreed that sixteen years old is the best time to perform it. Contrary to United States, Japan and Egypt adolescent responded (18, 20 and 17, respectively).

The last significant numbers was related to the minimum age to trial a person. The youngest age were answered by Americans and Egyptian (eleven and fourthteen years old, respectively). United Kingdom and Mexico adolescent responded that fifth teen years old represent the minimum age to send to a court a person. Japanesse surveyed agreed that 18 years old was the right time to process a person who commit a crime.

In brief, japaneese adolescent have the highiest numbers in comparison with the rest. The Egyptian believe that a youngest age adolescents should acquired their right. While USA, UK and Mexico have similar age, which young adults are allowed to be granted for their rights and responsabilities.

Votes
Average: 8.5 (4 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: twenty-three
...tries japanesse adolescent believe that twenty three years old is the right age to married. ...
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Line 5, column 33, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'related'.
Suggestion: related
...ied. Another noticeable numbers were relate to which age represent their first nati...
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Line 9, column 113, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: the
...ith the rest. The Egyptian believe that a youngest age adolescents should acquire...
^

Discourse Markers used:
['conversely', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'while', 'in brief']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.269230769231 0.268076937826 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.157692307692 0.116061578633 136% => OK
Adjectives: 0.142307692308 0.0759168565197 187% => Less adjectives wanted.
Adverbs: 0.0153846153846 0.0366838410393 42% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0192307692308 0.0131127313244 147% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0692307692308 0.155750635184 44% => More prepositions wanted.
Participles: 0.0230769230769 0.0379272487307 61% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.7664942196 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0538461538462 0.0210936926555 255% => Less infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0884615384615 0.0948980150116 93% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00384615384615 0.00437022459523 88% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0153846153846 0.00967000014798 159% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1488.0 1161.00487805 128% => OK
No of words: 235.0 196.9 119% => OK
Chars per words: 6.33191489362 5.90752243213 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 3.73763899035 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.412765957447 0.337110787985 122% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.314893617021 0.247514529752 127% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.2 0.171178102325 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.123404255319 0.112407865282 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7664942196 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502127659574 0.546246751206 92% => OK
Word variations: 45.9433200003 49.3433353143 93% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 8.93414634146 146% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0769230769 23.0094962315 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0036545199 42.9750493124 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.461538462 135.714022679 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0769230769 23.0094962315 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.461538461538 0.689975730869 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.84146341463 130% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.48048780488 203% => OK
Readability: 49.5662847791 47.7609492067 104% => OK
Elegance: 1.88 2.94281807926 64% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345485546093 0.418131533498 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122821597585 0.181151798455 68% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0799476698342 0.0850326197045 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.655755608646 0.706616315825 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.148266606313 0.157042692854 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162966746099 0.228904883108 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0639113148111 0.108899403657 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.328052314225 0.367819155151 89% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0707952561575 0.0812612215331 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.238715311978 0.316326947829 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680850204722 0.0921553760075 74% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70731707317 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.14146341463 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.08536585366 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 3.16585365854 190% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 0.956097560976 105% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 3.02926829268 165% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 7.1512195122 168% => OK

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 7.0 Out of 9