The graph below presents the information about Nathan’s Hot Dog Eating Contest in Brooklyn’s Coney Island, USA.

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The graph below presents the information about Nathan’s Hot Dog Eating Contest in Brooklyn’s Coney Island, USA.

Given is the bar chart showing Nathan’s hot dog eating contest which is held in Brooklyn’s Coney Island, USA during 30 years, between 1980 and 2010.

Overall, there are four countries: US, Japan, Mexico and Germany scoring for winners. In this case, American males have won 20 times for this eating contest, while Japanese males only record nine-time win.

To begin with, from 1980 to 1982 we can see that American males had won the contest, with approximately 9 to 10 hot dogs and buns eaten. After no breaking records since 2 years, the figures of American contestants showing the overall growth in numbers of hot dogs and burns eaten had rebounded on the podium for 10 years, between 1985 and 1995. By comparison with the previous figures in 1999, American males had almost fourfold proportion of eating this meal.

A Japanese, Takeru Kobayashi who reigned Nathan’s championship for six years running, was defeated by Joey Chesnut, an American, who was highly likely to eat 68 hot dogs and buns in 15 minutes in 2009. This was the top notch ever during the eating contest. However, between 1983 and 1984 Birgit Felden, a German female, only consuming almost 9 hot dogs and a Mexican, who ate 19.5 hot dogs had showed that this competition was open to all contestants from different countries.

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Given is the bar chart showing Nathan’s hot dog eating contest which is held
Given is the bar chart showing Nathan’s hot dog eating contests which were held

However, between 1983 and 1984 Birgit Felden, a German female, only consuming almost 9 hot dogs and a Mexican, who ate 19.5 hot dogs...
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