The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line chart given, elucidated information on the number of food consumption in China (per gram/person/week) with three different type ( meat, salt, fish) between 1985 – 2010. The y-axis quantified the information in a range 0 – 900 in a number
In 1985, the meat consumption reached in 100 grams per person per week. In 25 years period , there was a slight increased in meat consumption from 100 grams per person per week to 200 grams person week between 1985 until 2010, on the other hand there was a gradually declined in salt consumption, started less than 500 grams per person per week to 200 grams per person per week at same period.
Meanwhile, there was a fluctuation in fish consumption in period 1985 to 1995 from 600 grams person week in 1985 and reach 700 grams person week by 1990. Although it dropped at 600 grams by 1995, it then gradually surged and reached a peak more than 800 grams per person week by 2010.
In conclusion, fish was the most popular food in China than salt and meat in period years 1985-2010
The line chart given, elucidated information on the number of food consumption in China
The given line chart elucidated information on the number of food consumption in China
there was a gradually declined in salt consumption
there was a gradually declined trend in salt consumption
at same period.
at the same period.
in period years 1985-2010
in the years 1985-2010
Sentence: Meanwhile, there was a fluctuation in fish consumption in period 1985 to 1995 from 600 grams person week in 1985 and reach 700 grams person week by 1990.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to grams and person
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
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No. of Different Words: 80 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.683 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.44 4.6
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No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 44 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 26 50
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No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.238 0.07
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