The graph below shows four countries of residents of overseas students in Australia

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The graph below shows four countries of residents of overseas students in Australia

Given was the line chart providing data regarding to the changes in the amount of students in different four countries which had residence of visitor arrivals for education in Australia over a 19-year period from 1982 to 2000.

Generally speaking, it could be observed that, from 1982 to 2000, all of the data emerged as upward trend.

To begin with, on the premise of the shown period, in 1982 there was no students from Indonesia settled in Australia to continue their study, but after 4 years, there had been less-modest improvement and subsequently it rose gradually till 1994. Afterwards, the number of Indonesian students rocketed dramatically to capture just under 30 in 1998, but it slipped back a little less than 25 till 2000. On the contrary, Hong Kong students seemed to enroll study in Australia in 1988 and then the amount of students increased markedly till 1995. Moreover, it jumped up to capture just under 20 in 1997 but it dropped and climbed again until around 18 students in 2000.

On the other hand, Malaysia students have started their study to Australia in 1998 which was proved with about 5 pupils and it had a marginal improvement in the next 12 years and subsequently it went up modestly as many as Hong Kong students did. Meanwhile, Singapore students tended to begin study in Australia in 1990 and the number of pupils climbed sharply to capture almost 20 in 2000.

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emerged as upward trend.
emerged as upward trends.

To begin with, on the premise of the shown period, in 1982 there was no students from Indonesia settled in Australia to continue their study,
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Malaysia students have started their study to Australia in 1998
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