The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

This graph illustrates the rates of unemployment which occurred in two countries, US and Japan during March 1993 and March 1999. The chart consists of work force which shown by percentage and each periods every march.

Japan rates of unemployment increased steadily between 1993 and 1999, moreover US rates deteriorated gradually during the same time. However, started from March 1998, both US and Japan gained the same percentage until March 1999, and occurred fluctuated numbers in the previous years.

The US rates, started from March 1993 raised 7.0%, decreased around 0.5% year and year out, besides Japan rates reached 2.5% in March 1993 and grew up dramatically in the same year, so that in 1994 gained up to 3.5%. Furthermore, in March 1996 there were significant changes happened in both countries, while US turned down from 6.0% to 5.0% and Japan raised from 3.5% until 4.5% but ever got turn down spontaneously to 4.0% around this year.

Each country has different unemployment rates which divined by the number of work force, while US has changes from 7.0% until 5.0% and Japan reached from 2.5% up to 5.0% in the same interval time.

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The chart consists of work force which shown by percentage and each periods every march.
The chart consists of work force which is shown by percentage and each period in march.
The chart consists of work force shown by percentage and each period in march.

The US rates, started from March 1993 raised 7.0%, decreased around 0.5% year and year out
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Sentence: Furthermore, in March 1996 there were significant changes happened in both countries, while US turned down from 6.0 to 5.0 and Japan raised from 3.5 until 4.5 but ever got turn down spontaneously to 4.0 around this year.
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Each country has different unemployment rates which divined by the number of work force
Each country has different unemployment rates which are divined by the number of work force
Each country has different unemployment rates divined by the number of work force

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