The line chart compares the three bakeries namely-Bernie Buns, Lovely Loaves and Robbie's Bakery with their annual salaries in pounds over the period from 2000 to 2010.
It is clear that, both Robbie's Bakery and Bernie Buns had followed an upwards trends whereas Lovely Loaves had choosed a downwards trend.
To begin with, all three bakeries had started to earned in same year 2000.Similarly,Lovely Loaves had the highest annual earning at just over 60,000 pounds, whereas Bernie Buns had earned only 20,000 pounds,the lowest income. At the same time, figure of Robbie's Bakery witnessed a fairly stable amount until 2005 at just above 50,000,before gradual rise to approximately 70,000 income in year 2007. And then an annual amount rocketed to around 100,000 pounds in 2008, after overtaking Lovely Loaves in 2006 increased slowly to just over 100,000 by the end of year.
Next,an annual earning of Lovely Loaves dropped gradually with some fluctuations from a nearly 60,000 pounds in 2000 to 40,000 in 2008, after surpassing by Robbie's Bakery and Bernie Buns, and then stayed similar at 40,000 pounds thereafter till 2010. Additionally,figure of Bernie Buns showed a slight increase to near 40,000 in 2003, and then remained constant until 2008,before sudden rise to just below 70,000 by 2010.
In conclusion, Bernie buns was surpassed by both Robbie's Bakery and Lovely Loaves until mid-2007, and then overtaked Lovely Loaves counterpart thereafter.
all three bakeries had started to earned in same year 2000
all three bakeries had started to earn in the same year 2000
before gradual rise to approximately 70,000 income in year 2007
before a gradual rise to approximately 70,000 income in year 2007
And then an annual amount rocketed to around 100,000 pounds in 2008, after overtaking Lovely Loaves in 2006 increased slowly to just over 100,000 by the end of year.
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after surpassing by Robbie's Bakery and Bernie Buns, and then stayed similar at 40,000 pounds thereafter till 2010.
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Sentence: It is clear that, both Robbie's Bakery and Bernie Buns had followed an upwards trends whereas Lovely Loaves had choosed a downwards trend.
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Sentence: In conclusion, Bernie buns was surpassed by both Robbie's Bakery and Lovely Loaves until mid-2007, and then overtaked Lovely Loaves counterpart thereafter.
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