The way people of Somecountry invested their money during the years 2001 - 2006
The graph compares how the people invested their money into 2 different types of investment, Bonds and Stocks, during the year 2000 - 2006 in Somecountry.
It can be clearly seen that Stocks were the highest trend of investment rather than Bonds, and all trends (both Stocks and Bonds) encountered an upward movement in all years. In 2001, investing money in Stocks was 210 billion.
There was gradual improvement in this type until the year 2003 where it was 216 and 227 billion respectively. In fact, the significant increase happened in 2004 as much as 289 billion, in 2005 was about 297, lastly it peaked around 311 billion.
On the other hand, Bonds commenced by exact 100 billion in 2001. This type of investment was experiencing gradual rise year by year, except in 2002 at approximately 123 billion. Meanwhile, during the years 2003 – 2006 tiny gradual upward trend happened, where it was 157, 162, 179 and 188 billion respectively.
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