You would like to find a new place to live.Write a letter to the local estate agency. In your letter- explain why you would like to move- say what type of house you would like- ask about the options you haveDear Sir or Madam,

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You would like to find a new place to live.
Write a letter to the local estate agency. In your letter
- explain why you would like to move
- say what type of house you would like
- ask about the options you have
Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam,

Hello, I am Darby Shin who would like to move to a new place. I am writing this letter to ask you to find the new place. There are three people in my family who are my son, wife and me.

My house which I have been living in for the last five years is too old to live anymore, for the roof of my house leaks rain. Additionally, my neighbors make noise every night. I think that they have played a party at that time. I would like to move to a new place to provide a better environment for my family. Therefore, I need a new house, which is clean, not old, a quiet place. In addition, I hope that I will live in the new place having my own garden, and three rooms- one room is for a dressing room, another room is for my son and the other room is for my wife and me.

I know that I ask you too many things. I do not care about the price of the new house. Please find the best house for us. I am looking forward to hearing from you.

Faithfully yours,
Darby Shin

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for the roof of my house leaks rain.
because the roof of my house leaks in rain.

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More compound or complex sentences wanted.

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Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
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No. of Sentences: 15 10
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No. of Characters: 747 1000
No. of Different Words: 104 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.77 4.0
Average Word Length: 3.698 4.6
Word Length SD: 1.891 2.4
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 14 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 7 40
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Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Sentence Length SD: 9.437 7.5
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
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