The bar chart below shows the employment of all males and females workers by occupation in the UK in the year 2005 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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The bar chart below shows the employment of all males and females workers by occupation in the UK in the year 2005.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by lili__nhnh on Mon, 08/30/2021 - 00:27

The chart gives the percentage of the workforce by gender and type of job in the UK in 2005.
Overall, men tended to involve in managerial jobs such as skilled trades, senior officials, or professional occupations. Meanwhile, women were common in jobs like sales and customer service, administration, and personal service.
The most noticeable difference is illustrated in the skilled trades field, 20% of the workforce were males, compared to no more than 3% of females. The same pattern was seen for the proportion of process, plant, and machine operatives professions, about 12% of men’s involvement, compared to 2% of women’s. For every eighteen men employees in managers and senior officials, there were eleven females. There were more men (about 14%) employed as professionals than women (11%).
Over a fourfold percentage of female workers (around 22%) compared to males (5%) are administrators and secretaries. Additionally, women are seven times more likely than men to be employed in personal services. Surprisingly, elementary jobs such as labourers and catering assistants nearly had the same proportion. It was also true for associate professional and technical occupations.

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Average: 6.7 (17 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, while, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1004.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 183.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48633879781 4.92477711251 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67800887145 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19951771575 2.65546596893 120% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622950819672 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 314.1 283.868780488 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.1570273084 43.030603864 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2727272727 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6363636364 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.54545454545 5.23603664747 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0590040192756 0.215688989381 27% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0265076780263 0.103423049105 26% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426136198347 0.0843802449381 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0502928914861 0.15604864568 32% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478397595107 0.0819641961636 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.2329268293 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 61.2550243902 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 11.4140731707 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 40.7170731707 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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