the bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

Essay topics:

the bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006.

The bar chart compares four different platforms. namely mobile phones, online, consoles and handheld devices in terms of the number of the turn over in dollars from sales from 2000 to 2006.

Overall, It is clear that the number of three types of digital games increased steadily through every year, while the number of handheld games was at the least twice as high as those for other platforms.

In 2000, the proportion of handheld games accounted for $11 billion, whereas that of console games constituted under $ 6 billion. Moreover, the figures for mobile or inline games were not presented in 2000. For the next three years, there was a sharp increase of $4 billion in the number of handheld video games. On the other hand, the sales of consoles games decreased significantly by two billion. Besides that the proportion of mobile phone and online games started to be popular and a gradually increase of three billion was seen in the sales in 2003.

In 2006, the number of handheld, online and mobile games reached peaks at nine billion dollars. In contrast, turn over from console games dropped dramatically to the lowest point at 5 billion.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Namely
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Suggestion: namely,
...hart compares four different platforms. namely mobile phones, online, consoles and han...
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Message: The currency mark is usually written without any whitespace: '$6'.
Suggestion: $6
...that of console games constituted under $ 6 billion. Moreover, the figures for mobi...
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Suggestion:
...ree years, there was a sharp increase of billion in the number of handheld video ...
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Line 5, column 484, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('gradually') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
... online games started to be popular and a gradually increase of three billion was seen in the sales ...
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Suggestion:
...online and mobile games reached peaks at nine billion dollars. In contrast, turn ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, if, moreover, so, whereas, while, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 957.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 194.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93298969072 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45654407858 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551546391753 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 285.3 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1781934179 43.030603864 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.7 112.824112599 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 22.9334400587 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.23603664747 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281337284831 0.215688989381 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120314368825 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410615403895 0.0843802449381 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164431989486 0.15604864568 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039337700641 0.0819641961636 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 61.2550243902 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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