The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video.
Academic Writing Sample Task 1 #2
IELTS Tip
Each time you come across any form of graph, chart or table, study it carefully and practise picking out the major changes that the figure shows. Imagine that you are explaining to someone else what you have noticed from the graph.
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Academic Writing Task 1
Model answer
The chart shows the changes in the sales of video material / DVDs, games software and CDs around the world in billions of dollars over a three-year period. It can be seen that the sales of videos / DVDs and games software have increased, while the sales of CDs have gone down slightly.
Between 2000 and 2003, the sale of videos and DVDs rose by approximately 13 billion dollars. In 2000, just under 20 billion dollars worth of these items were sold, but in 2003, this figure had risen to a little over 30 billion dollars.
The sales of games software also rose during this period, but less sharply. Sales increased from about 13 billion dollars in 2000 to just under 20 billion dollars three years later. By contrast, during the same time period, the sale of CDs fell from 35 billion dollars in 2000 to about 32.5 billion dollars in 2003.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Academic Writing Sample Task 1 #2 IELTS...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, so, while, at least
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1220.0 965.302439024 126% => OK
No of words: 250.0 196.424390244 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 3.73543355544 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.23784193095 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 106.607317073 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 339.3 283.868780488 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.482926829268 621% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.4926829268 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.8178249056 43.030603864 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8461538462 112.824112599 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 22.9334400587 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.30769230769 5.23603664747 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 10.0 3.83414634146 261% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360388217249 0.215688989381 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144230064133 0.103423049105 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.217120018797 0.0843802449381 257% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149077446355 0.15604864568 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.250762406037 0.0819641961636 306% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 61.2550243902 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.3012195122 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.9970731707 87% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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