The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.
The chart presents changes in the number of mobile phone sold in the top five company brands over 4 years from 2009 to 2013.
In term of Sam Sung and Apple brands, there were an up ward trend of selling phone over the period shown. At the start of the period, with around 240 millions Sam Sung phone was sold in 2009. This figure rose significantly to 450 millions phone to become the highest of all in 2013. While only around 20 millions Apple phone in 2009. This rate grew gradually to 150 millions phone in 2013.
When it come to Nokia and LG brands, there were an downward trend of using phone from 2009 to 2013. In 2009, Nokia brands was the most popular phone in the world with around 450 millions phone. This rate decreased slightly to 420 millions phone in 2011 before falling sharply to 250 millions in 2013. Standing at much lower of popular phone used, there was 120 millions LG phone using in 2009, this proportion went down steadly to 70 millions in 2009.
Around 50 million ZTE phone was sold in 2009, this brands increased slightly to 60 millons phone purchasing to become the lowest of all in 2013.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Standing at much lower of popular phone used, there was 120 millions LG phone using in 2009, this proportion went down steadly to 70 millions in 2009.
Error: steadly Suggestion: steadily
Sentence: Around 50 million ZTE phone was sold in 2009, this brands increased slightly to 60 millons phone purchasing to become the lowest of all in 2013.
Error: millons Suggestion: millions
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 205 200
No. of Characters: 889 1000
No. of Different Words: 98 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.784 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.337 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.041 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 49 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 31 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 20 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 6 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.564 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.091 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.512 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.512 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.182 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 284, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e to become the highest of all in 2013. While only around 20 millions Apple phone in ...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 320, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Apple) must be used with a third-person verb: 'phones'.
Suggestion: phones
...13. While only around 20 millions Apple phone in 2009. This rate grew gradually to 15...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 9, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
...to 150 millions phone in 2013. When it come to Nokia and LG brands, there were an d...
^^^^
Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...come to Nokia and LG brands, there were an downward trend of using phone from 2009...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 33.7804878049 145% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 915.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 205.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46341463415 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.78388967377 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.0648959683 2.65546596893 78% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 106.607317073 92% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478048780488 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 244.8 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.114634146341 872% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1102656776 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1818181818 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6363636364 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.18181818182 5.23603664747 23% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275386562304 0.215688989381 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135695551886 0.103423049105 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0884338718684 0.0843802449381 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224317977901 0.15604864568 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0957795972552 0.0819641961636 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 87.05 61.2550243902 142% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 11.4140731707 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.84 8.06136585366 85% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.4329268293 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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