The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount ofsupport they received from employers.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write

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The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount ofsupport they received from employers.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words

The two given graphs demonstrate the educational status of 5 generations, from people under 26 to over 49. While the first chart illustrates the reasons for study, the latter indicates the supports each age group received. All data are shown in percentages.
Apparently, the purposes of studying for career and for interest shared an absolutely negative trend. Whereas career subject for study decreases, the interest objective in study increases as we grow older. Educational incentive for those under 26 reported to be 80% - which is 4 times higher than those’s over 49. And vice versa, when only 10% interest for study in the first group age, the data rose to 7 times higher as for the last one. The two purposes study equaled when people reach forties, of 40% for each.
For the second paragraph, the supports each generation received varies differently. Obviously, students under 26 revealed to gain highest help of over 60%. This is followed by age group of 26-29 with 50% of aid. Overall, it is reported that the combination of students under thirties are supported with the great help, according to the data given. People between 30-39 receive help with a proportion of about 30% which is approximately 2 lower higher than the first group age. The last two generations’ percentages are sequently 35% and 40% of employer support.
From these perspectives, we can conlude that students under thirties study mostly for their career and receive consider supports. As we grow older and start pursuing knowledge for enjoyment, the helps gradually decrease.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...up age, the data rose to 7 times higher as for the last one. The two purposes stud...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'gain the highest'.
Suggestion: gain the highest
...bviously, students under 26 revealed to gain highest help of over 60%. This is followed by a...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eive help with a proportion of about 30% which is approximately 2 lower higher th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, first, if, second, so, whereas, while, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1317.0 965.302439024 136% => OK
No of words: 256.0 196.424390244 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14453125 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80616244795 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 106.607317073 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58203125 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 283.868780488 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.114634146341 872% => Less interrogative sentences wanted.
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 8.94146341463 179% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.6189897308 43.030603864 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.3125 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 22.9334400587 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5625 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 3.70975609756 350% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177380460285 0.215688989381 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608792518588 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395443200723 0.0843802449381 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112001792393 0.15604864568 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0131214561908 0.0819641961636 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.06136585366 109% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 40.7170731707 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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