The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000.

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The diagram below gives information about the number of parcels delivered by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000.

Given are two figures provide detailed information about the number of packages delivered by two popular mail services companies - Federal Express and TNT Mail Services over a period of 90 years. It can be clearly seen that despite " Federal Express " was most preferred for first 70 years, "TNT Mail Services" showed a remarkable increase and finished above at the end of the period.
According to the graph, in the first 70 years " TNT" witnessed an upward trend from 5.000 to 10.000, while that of "FedEx" fluctuated between 12.500 and 24.500. The following 15 years, " TNT" was mostly uniform with a minimal fluctuation, yet "FedEx" came with a noticeable rose, after figure levelled off around 17.500 and remained relatively static until the end of the period. At the same time, "TNT" company trend showed a considerable grow in 1980, pushing the figures higher to the peak and became even more popular for last 20 years.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 841.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 158.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32278481013 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.54539209256 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99780387162 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.683544303797 0.547539520022 125% => OK
syllable_count: 249.3 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences, or put a space between two sentences.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.6084730552 43.030603864 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 168.2 112.824112599 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6 22.9334400587 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.23603664747 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111872686128 0.215688989381 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0863684774641 0.103423049105 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130048938789 0.0843802449381 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118306328784 0.15604864568 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0996416013294 0.0819641961636 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 13.2329268293 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 61.2550243902 65% => It means the essay is relatively harder to read.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 11.4140731707 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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