The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon from egg to adult fish Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The salmon life cycle in eight different stages from laying eggs to be adults is illustrated by the diagram.

Overall, it is observed that the stages are located in three various ecosystems, which are in a river, estuary, and ocean subsequently. Obviously, salmons live in the brackish water not as long as other places.

Regarding the first stage, in the freshwater, it reveals this species spawn plenty of eggs, which will incubate throughout several periods, being the second one. Continuedly, the third stage, if those have hatched, it is marked that they have been juveniles, commencing to rear in this area as the next stage. Furthermore, following their instinct, the babies swim downstream to estuary, adapting to the higher saline water, then rearing there, recorded as the fifth.

Turning to the sixth, they migrate to the ocean, which the concentration of salinity is denser than in the two former ecosystems. Meanwhile, the seventh indicates that migration will end when schools have arrived at the growing area, reaching maturity. These adult fish, in the final stage, travel back to the river, reproducing new individuals throughout the breeding season, and a new life begins.

Votes
Average: 9.5 (3 votes)

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...reshwater, it reveals this species spawn plenty of eggs, which will incubate thro...
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...s. Meanwhile, the seventh indicates that migration will end when schools have ar...
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... indicates that migration will end when schools have arrived at the growing area...
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...ve arrived at the growing area, reaching maturity. These adult fish, in the final...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, regarding, second, so, then, third, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 23.0 33.7804878049 68% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1010.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26041666667 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70536696525 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 106.607317073 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.677083333333 0.547539520022 124% => OK
syllable_count: 299.7 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.7125611807 43.030603864 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.222222222 112.824112599 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 22.9334400587 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 5.23603664747 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0981394373868 0.215688989381 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453530903085 0.103423049105 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.088118765034 0.0843802449381 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0897929248666 0.15604864568 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112449958137 0.0819641961636 137% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.2329268293 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 11.4140731707 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.86 8.06136585366 122% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 40.7170731707 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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