The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture illustrates the linear process of making honey. Overall, there are seven main stages of producing honey which begins with the hive construction and ends when the honey is ready to be collected and used.

First of all, honey bees build their own hive that they can use in order to contain honey. Each cell is made in hexagon shape. After that, they leave the container and fly to the garden where many flowers are blooming so that they can collect the nectar as can be seen in the third stage. In this stage, each bee uses their legs to gather the nectar from the flowers then bring it back to their hive.

Turn to next stage, the condensation occurs. A group of honey bees fan their wings to cool down the honey. Finally, the bee moves the bile on the top of a hole to another that makes the water evaporate quicker and the process is complete.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (37 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, so, then, third, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 706.0 965.302439024 73% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44025157233 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.05178016061 2.65546596893 77% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622641509434 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 215.1 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.7933526814 43.030603864 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.4444444444 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178674193945 0.215688989381 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765670795838 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629274789124 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132762307916 0.15604864568 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052078071948 0.0819641961636 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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