The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised.

Essay topics:

The diagrams below show UK students' responses to the question of to what extent would they describe themselves as financially organised.

The pie chart show the amount of better student manage their finance and the table shows the proportion of the students in three age groups.

it is vivid from the first chart, the highest proportion of the students who responded around 55% respond that they managed their finance fairly. And those who respond not or very organised is lower at around 21% and 20% respectively. By contrast, only few students able to say that they are not all organised, at around 4%.
Turning to the second chart, it is clearly seen from the second illustration the students who belongs from age group of over 36-year-old organised their finance well, where as the students who between 26 to 25 years manage their finance well but not considerable. the students who aged up to 26 years their performance of managing finance is very lower about 18%

Overall, it is clear that most of the students' answers are fairly organised. The number of students in the age group of over 36 years is very organised.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: It
...of the students in three age groups. it is vivid from the first chart, the high...
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Suggestion: whereas
...-year-old organised their finance well, where as the students who between 26 to 25 years...
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...heir finance well but not considerable. the students who aged up to 26 years their ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, second, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 14.0 5.60731707317 250% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 824.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79069767442 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50518661548 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523255813953 0.547539520022 96% => OK
syllable_count: 240.3 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0941060653 43.030603864 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.714285714 112.824112599 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.23603664747 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124745731386 0.215688989381 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767342381903 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0441820692726 0.0843802449381 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981355857198 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036542693807 0.0819641961636 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 61.2550243902 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.3012195122 100% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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