The graph below and the chart show the answers people gave about the extent to which they are satisfied with their lives and what they think would make them happiest Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compariso

Essay topics:

The graph below and the chart show the answers people gave about the extent to which they are satisfied with their lives and what they think would make them happiest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph depicts how people in general are satisfied about their lives, illustrating differences between ages. The bar chart gives information about what would make people happiest, focusing on health and money.

It is clear from the first graph that the trends of men and women are very similar, infact there is just a slight difference in the 15-20 age group when men are more satisfied about their life then women with a score of 5.5 and 5.3 respectively. After this period, the trends tend to decrease gradually reaching the lowest score of 5.0 for both aged 41-50. Then they start to rise significantly to a peak of 5.6 in the 61-79 age group.

In the bar chart, there are the percentages of what make people happiest over their existence. During the adolescence, as you can see 55% of people are happier because of the money against almost 12% of those who prefer health. Over the years, these percentages change and cross in the middle age when there is an increase to 41% for those who say that health would make them happiest and a gradually decrease to 22% for people who prefer money. Then the trends continue to follow this line, reaching almost 45% and less than 10% for health and money respectively at the age of 75.

Overall, it seems that people are more satisfied of their lives when they are younger and when they get older. Besides, the youngests' happiness is linked to money, whereas for older people it comes from health.

Votes
Average: 8 (13 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 58, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'people the happiest'.
Suggestion: people the happiest
... there are the percentages of what make people happiest over their existence. During the adoles...
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Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('gradually') instead an adjective, or a noun ('decrease') instead of another adjective.
...hat health would make them happiest and a gradually decrease to 22% for people who prefer money. The...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, then, whereas, as for, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.15609756098 317% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 20.0 5.60731707317 357% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1203.0 965.302439024 125% => OK
No of words: 256.0 196.424390244 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69921875 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 3.73543355544 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.34858550661 2.65546596893 88% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 106.607317073 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54296875 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 352.8 283.868780488 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.160403863 43.030603864 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.363636364 112.824112599 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2727272727 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81818181818 5.23603664747 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241564274413 0.215688989381 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104192330529 0.103423049105 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0948331853713 0.0843802449381 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161678319538 0.15604864568 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770903208805 0.0819641961636 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.2329268293 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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