The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons there relevant.

The line graph illustrates the changes of usage of the gadgets in the UK from 1996 to 2003.
As regards the first item, a CD player, had the highest result of 60% in 1996-1997. Moreover, CD players were dominants in British households with a 80% in 2002-2003.
Furthemore , the mobile phones were less famous and had the third place in the graph. It had and rose faster after 1999, then it become the second most used technology with 70% of usage.
3’ Likewise one of the slight rises belongs to the home computers. In addition, its usage started approximately from 30% and increased to 57-58% without any drops.
Moreover, the last but not least digest is the internet access. Regardless the fact that it only become available in households by 1998, this innovation had a wild rise, up to over 40% within 5 years.
On the whole, in this illustration we can see the effect of the technological changes. In just 7 years more and more technology had been provided. Hence, British households started to have more access to the information and started to expand all opportunities.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 147, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...re dominants in British households with a 80% in 2002-2003. Furthemore , the mob...
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Line 3, column 11, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...lds with a 80% in 2002-2003. Furthemore , the mobile phones were less famous and ...
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Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...had and rose faster after 1999, then it become the second most used technology with 70...
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Line 5, column 24, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'not the least'.
Suggestion: not the least
...out any drops. Moreover, the last but not least digest is the internet access. Regardl...
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Line 5, column 56, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ast but not least digest is the internet access. Regardless the fact that it only...
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Line 6, column 42, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n the whole, in this illustration we can see the effect of the technological chan...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, likewise, moreover, second, then, third, as regards, in addition, on the whole

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 901.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81818181818 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73780166279 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 106.607317073 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.657754010695 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 262.8 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 20.2338756105 43.030603864 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 75.0833333333 112.824112599 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5833333333 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.08333333333 5.23603664747 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 3.83414634146 156% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.092693251421 0.215688989381 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0333677959343 0.103423049105 32% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317887431941 0.0843802449381 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0467703647602 0.15604864568 30% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0380297275167 0.0819641961636 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.2329268293 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.38 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 40.7170731707 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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