THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS IN PERCENTAGE TERMS THE CHANGING PATTERNS OF DOMESTIC ACCESS TO MODERN TECHNOLOGY IN HOMES IN THE UK

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THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS IN PERCENTAGE TERMS THE CHANGING PATTERNS OF DOMESTIC ACCESS TO MODERN TECHNOLOGY IN HOMES IN THE UK

The graph illustrates details about the percentage of modern technology which was utilized by british from 1994 to 2008.

Overall, it is obvious that all the groups were rapidly upward in the first 12 years and then they reduced the climbing speed in the next 24 months.Besides that, cd player used to be the highest but the DVD player take the lead after that.

Looking at the cd player pattern, we can see there was a slightly change. In 12-year-time, this group consistently rose and hit a peak at 82%. after that, it gradually felt to 80%.

Turning to the other groups, the most noticeable thing is the rapid growth in all of them. At the beginning, the trend of mobile phone was fluctuated; however, since 2007, it has started to surge to nearly 80 %. The same thing happened to the internet connection, it continually went up over the time. Although DVD player appeared later, but it sharply grew and then became the most used by the british.

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Average: 1.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...D player take the lead after that. Looking at the cd player pattern, we can...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, look, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 33.7804878049 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 813.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83928571429 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.551990815 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.672619047619 0.547539520022 123% => OK
syllable_count: 218.7 283.868780488 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 1.53170731707 392% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.6582694144 43.030603864 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3333333333 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.23603664747 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0588726171503 0.215688989381 27% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0244481427221 0.103423049105 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0552780291117 0.0843802449381 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0506701693592 0.15604864568 32% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731075615589 0.0819641961636 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.2329268293 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 11.4140731707 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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