The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the U.K.

The graph shows the percentages of changing access to modern technology in domestic areas in the UK from 1996 to 2003.
There is definitely upward trend by varying degrees through these seven years.

Domestic access of home computer and CD player increased gradually through seven years. The former started at thirty percent and ends at about fifty in 2002/3. Likewise, the access of CD player decreased slightly from the percentage of sixty in 1996/7 to approximately eighty percent in 2002/3.

By contrast, two other modern technology devices, mobile phone and internet access, rose dramatically. As regards the first, it started at about twenty percent and went up noticeably. Also the access of internet had a significant rise from ten percent to over forty percent.

Generally the remarkable access of internet is noticeable which was started at 1998/9 and was over forty percent after just four years.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 185, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... twenty percent and went up noticeably. Also the access of internet had a significan...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, likewise, so, as regards

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 774.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 146.0 196.424390244 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30136986301 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.47606760199 3.73543355544 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64138576253 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609589041096 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 225.9 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.8527222357 43.030603864 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.0 112.824112599 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2222222222 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.231330966522 0.215688989381 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103292867616 0.103423049105 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.142574405904 0.0843802449381 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145380020655 0.15604864568 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.170168063002 0.0819641961636 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.06136585366 103% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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