THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS IN PERCENTAGE TERMS THE CHANGING PATTERNS OF DOMESTIC ACCESS TO MODERN TECHNOLOGY IN HOMES IN THE UK

Essay topics:

THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS IN PERCENTAGE TERMS THE CHANGING PATTERNS OF DOMESTIC ACCESS TO MODERN TECHNOLOGY IN HOMES IN THE UK

The graph provides data on how to change the domestic model to entry to modern technology in households throughout many terms in the UK between 1996 and 2003.
Overall, it can be seen that the adjust of different technical equipment in households has an upturn over 8 years.
As can be seen in the graph, the CD player reached its peak before slightly increasing, from about 60% to 82%, between 1996/97 and 2003/03. Meanwhile, Internet access reached the lowest level of in 1998/99, about 10% and then this figure increased considerably, around 50% in 2002/03.
The next 8 years, the home computer and the mobile phone had an upturn nearly similarly. However, during the period from 1998/88 to 2000/01, there was a dramatic rise in mobile phone and this figure was higher than the home computer, around 45% and 38% respectively.
In conclusion, It could be seen that the domestic of electronic devices in the family will experience steady growth in the future.

Votes
Average: 8.3 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 30, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...and 2003. Overall, it can be seen that the adjust of different technical equipment in hou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, similarly, then, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 804.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93251533742 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61929424125 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650306748466 0.547539520022 119% => OK
syllable_count: 226.8 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.889797777 43.030603864 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.857142857 112.824112599 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2857142857 22.9334400587 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.23603664747 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161138656581 0.215688989381 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.068380851704 0.103423049105 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.095798528196 0.0843802449381 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085901895213 0.15604864568 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108729734343 0.0819641961636 133% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.2329268293 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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