the graph shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK

Essay topics:

the graph shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

The line graph gives information about changes in the percentage of household access to CD player, mobile phone, home computer and Internet access over a period of 7 years, from 1996 to 2003

It is clear from the graph that the trends were upward over the period shown.

As can be seen from the figure, the Internet had a late starting point in 1998 and was the lowest percentage compared to the other figures; however, it experienced the most significant change with fourfold increase, from 10% to over 40% in 2003.

In comparison with other forms of modern technology, CD player had the highest figure which almost doubled the percentage of the Internet access, at around 80% in the end of period. There is a steady growth in home computer and nearly reached 60% but it was not higher than the Mobile phone data. The percentage of using mobile phones witnessed fluctuations during the given time but it followed the positive direction which ended the period with the second rank, approximately 70%.

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Average: 7.9 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: comparison,
...ase, from 10% to over 40% in 2003. In comparison with other forms of modern technology, ...
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 841.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88953488372 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50729061331 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 106.607317073 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616279069767 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.4926829268 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.5930398494 43.030603864 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.2 112.824112599 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.4 22.9334400587 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.23603664747 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169160254343 0.215688989381 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847943253103 0.103423049105 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577760870739 0.0843802449381 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104786911106 0.15604864568 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660218121307 0.0819641961636 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 13.2329268293 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 61.2550243902 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.4329268293 162% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.9970731707 142% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.0658536585 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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