The graph shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

Essay topics:

The graph shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

The line graph describes the varying proportion of domestic access to modern technology in British homes.

it is clear that the proportions of every mode of modern technology were similar in terms of upward patterns. However, while the figure for CD player remained highest in every year over the given period, the opposite could be seen in that for Internet.

In 1996, Domestic access to CD player stood at the exceptional rate of 60%, which continued to rise to about 70% in 1998, in which saw the advent of Internet access with the figure being recorded at over 10%. From the 1998 onwards, despite the exponential quadruple to over 40% in 2003, the proportion of Internet access was still twice lower than that of CD player,switfly increasing to over 80% at the end of the time phase.

When it comes to other modes of modern technology, in 1996 home computer’s percentage was 30% in comparison with only 20% of Mobile phone. Nonetheless, From 1997 to 2003, there was an massive growth in the rate of mobile phone, significantly tripling to 70% after having surpassed Home computer’s in 1998/99 which only improved gradually to over 40%,

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Average: 8.9 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: It
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, nonetheless, so, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 0.0 6.8 0% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 33.7804878049 148% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 964.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94358974359 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79586432623 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 113.0 106.607317073 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579487179487 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 285.3 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.0913024687 43.030603864 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.714285714 112.824112599 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8571428571 22.9334400587 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180828064438 0.215688989381 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0974675750489 0.103423049105 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0895089767763 0.0843802449381 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12846078733 0.15604864568 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0880576122294 0.0819641961636 107% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 61.2550243902 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.3012195122 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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