Hogwarts school in 2004 and its planning site in 2015

Essay topics:

Hogwarts school in 2004 and its planning site in 2015

The first picture shows the layout of Hogwarts Grammar School in 2004 and the second illustrates some proposed changes to this school in 2015.

It is clear that significant changes will be made in terms of the school's integration facilities. There will be more school building as the number of students increase and a completely new car park.

In 2004, Hogwarts school had 600 students and is expected to reach 1000 in 2015. By virtue of the upward trend in number of students, there are two more school building which are going to be constructed and are planned to connect with others by walking paths. The Sports Field, as a result, was reduced in size and relocated to the south of the original school to make room for the new buildings.

There will be a new car park erected next to the old building and is linked to the already established park by the main road which surrounds most of the area. Trees in Hogwarts Grammar school are likely to stay untouched in the plan.

Votes
Average: 9.1 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 812.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 175.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42736776895 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 96.0 106.607317073 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548571428571 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 227.7 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6894154477 43.030603864 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.5 112.824112599 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.875 22.9334400587 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.23603664747 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297220854008 0.215688989381 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142558150302 0.103423049105 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117599226018 0.0843802449381 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18732827269 0.15604864568 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0896330140359 0.0819641961636 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.54 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.3012195122 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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