The line graph below shows the average daily maximum temperatures for Auckland and Christchurch, two cities in New Zealand, and London and Edinburgh, two cities in United Kingdom.
Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph below indicate that he temperature of everyday of Auckland and Christchurch, which are two cities of New Zealand, and two cities of United Kingdom are London and Edinburgh
At quick glance at the graph reveals that the temperature of two nations is extremely different. The number of heating of New Zealand is the highest in January and December, but it is the lowest in June. On the other hand, the temperature of two cities in Unite Kingdom is the highest in June, the lowest in January and December.
The number of temperature for Auckland and Christchurch decreased suddenly between January and July. It reduced smoothly from 25 degree to 10 degree. Afterward it is slightly increased from July from December. It is peaked nearly at 20 degree on December. Beside that the degree of heating of London and Edinburg increased dramatically from 5 degree to 15 degree in the first 6 months of year. There was a very sharp decrease from July to December. The two cities of UK went down nearly at 5 degree in December.
It is worth noting that while the temperature of two cities in New Zealand decrease, the heating of UK increase and vice versa.
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I realized there are a lot of
I realized there are a lot of grammatical errors in your writing, for example, the first sentence:
The graph below indicate that he temperature of everyday of Auckland and Christchurch, which are two cities of New Zealand, and two cities of United Kingdom are London and Edinburgh
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also the essay needs more unique words. It means it is not developed efficiently. There are some duplicated words.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 49, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...h below indicate that he temperature of everyday of Auckland and Christchurch, which are...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 960.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75247524752 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67383565649 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.460396039604 0.547539520022 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 298.8 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 64.3920071011 43.030603864 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2727272727 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3636363636 22.9334400587 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.63636363636 5.23603664747 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.31577556401 0.215688989381 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113925767141 0.103423049105 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137321305312 0.0843802449381 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264300779511 0.15604864568 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.178709412491 0.0819641961636 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.06136585366 93% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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