The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of money expend in two nations, that are japan and Malaysia in son of 2010

It is totally vivid, the large proportion of money spent on food about 24% in japan while Malaysia had spent in around 27% on food which is more than in compare of japan consumption. In contrast japan had expended in massive amount of money on other goods and services purposes at 29% where as in Malaysia had invest 3% less than around 26% on other goods and services. In comparison of Malaysia expenditure about 34% on housing while investment of housing, japan is far behind than Malaysia , at 21% .

Furthermore, the investment of money in Japan has spent more about 6% while Malaysia had expended around only at 3% proportion of money on health care similarly japan invest a money on transport at 27% whereas Malaysia expenditure is 10% less than japan .

Overall, the japan expenditure in other good and services was larger than Malaysia similarly Malaysia investment is enormous in housing.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: whereas
...ther goods and services purposes at 29% where as in Malaysia had invest 3% less than aro...
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...urposes at 29% where as in Malaysia had invest 3% less than around 26% on other goods ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, similarly, so, whereas, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 848.0 965.302439024 88% => OK
No of words: 173.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90173410405 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66607474491 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473988439306 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 261.0 283.868780488 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.4926829268 151% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.8143697119 43.030603864 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 169.6 112.824112599 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6 22.9334400587 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 5.23603664747 210% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172596287496 0.215688989381 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117383998486 0.103423049105 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0312305601219 0.0843802449381 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136449195968 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323608830628 0.0819641961636 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.2329268293 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 61.2550243902 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.3012195122 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.9970731707 142% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.0658536585 145% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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