The table below gives information about the percentage Of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant

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The table below gives information about the percentage Of workforce employed in six industries in Australia between 1989 and 2009.summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons where relevant.

The given table chart illustrates the information about proportion of workers who got employment in manufacturing, retail, healthcare, construction, education, tourism industries during 1989 and 2009 in Australia.

Overall, it is clear that most of the workforce was employed during 2009 except manufacturing and retail industries. It can be seen that highest, employments were made in manufacturing during 1989.

To begin with, the proportion of employees who got employment in manufacturing was 15% and 9.8% respectively. 11.8% of employees were employed in retail during 1989; however ,the proportion of employees during 2009 was only 10.1%.there were only 9.6%of workers who got employment during 1989,the proportion increased by 1.7% after two decades in healthcare Industry.

Probing further, during 1989, 7.6%of employees were employed in construction industry; whereas, after 20 years the proportion reached at 8.3%. In case of education industry, the employments during 1989 were less (6.8%) than 2009(7.5%) . Tourism industry employed 5.5% employees in 1989, while proportion of workforce during 2009 was 7.3%.

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Average: 7.1 (64 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, whereas, while, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.97073170732 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 962.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.9018404908 4.92477711251 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13414634146 2.65546596893 118% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576687116564 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 251.1 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.539377726 43.030603864 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.25 112.824112599 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 22.9334400587 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.75 5.23603664747 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170118594588 0.215688989381 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100135865304 0.103423049105 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0658776576488 0.0843802449381 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135239599736 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620361737646 0.0819641961636 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.2329268293 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.94 11.4140731707 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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