The table below gives the information about students studying in six departments in an Australian university Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The table below gives the information about students studying in six departments.in an Australian university. Summarise the information making comparisons where relevant.

The assigned tabular chart illustrates the information about proportion of students who enrolled in humanity, education, science, physics, information technology and engineering department in a university of Australia during 2011.

Overall ,it is clear that most of female students studied in humanity department ;however, the proportion of non -english speakers and non native students was least in equivalent field. It can be observed That figure for females was more in all departments except information technology and engineering.

To begin with, 72%of females got enrollment in humanity department;whereas ,in engineering department the percentage of females was only 15%.in respect of science and physics the proportion of female students was 52%and 56% .while the figure for non English speakers was more than 3 fifths in science, information technology and engineering, the proportion of students for Humanity and education was above a tenth.

Probing further, non-native of Australia had similar proportion in physics and information technology which was accounted for 56%.there were 31%and 48%of non natives who studied in science and engineering respectively. It is interesting to note that female students were higest In figure as compared to other students .

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Average: 7.4 (62 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, whereas, while, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 3.97073170732 479% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1094.0 965.302439024 113% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.85026737968 4.92477711251 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2079892629 2.65546596893 121% => OK
Unique words: 101.0 106.607317073 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540106951872 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 336.6 283.868780488 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.45097560976 124% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 103.237186453 43.030603864 240% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 182.333333333 112.824112599 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1666666667 22.9334400587 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.23603664747 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 1.69756097561 589% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141370693482 0.215688989381 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849318650768 0.103423049105 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0324596922715 0.0843802449381 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105934360317 0.15604864568 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290467417891 0.0819641961636 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.7 13.2329268293 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.09 61.2550243902 38% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.51609756098 224% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.3012195122 172% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.24 11.4140731707 151% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 40.7170731707 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 11.4329268293 144% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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