The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
Company 2006 % Market Share 2007 % Market Share
HP 31.4 34
Dell 16.6 20.2
Acer 11.6 10.7
Toshiba 6.2 7.3
Lenovo 6.6 6.2
Fujitsu-Siemens 4.8 2.3
Others 22.8 19.3
Total 100 100
The supplied table illustrates the comparison of market shares,
of different computer brands in the years 2006 and 2007. The units
are measured in percentage.
Overall, HP has lead the competition in both years amongst the others
with 31.4 percent in the beginning, to an increase of 34 percent in
the following year. Following the rank of the leading manufacturer, Other
notebook computer companies possessed 22.8 percent of the shares but lost
3.5 percent of its smarket shares in the final year.
As to the next two known competitors, Dell followed the rank having 16.6
percent in 2006, to an increase of almost 4 percent in the latter year.
In contrast, Acer placed fourth in the competition with 11.6 percent but
decreased its shares in the market with almost 1 percent loss.
As to the other brands listed, each had the least of the shares in the
market.Toshiba increased its share at about 1 percent with 6.2 percent in 2006,
to 7.3 percent in 2007, while Lenovo faced a slight decrease from 6.6 percent to
6.2 percent.Fujitsu-Siemens doubled its loss from 4.8 percent to 2.3 percent,
making it the top least of the manufacture shares.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, while, as to, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 989.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 195.0 196.424390244 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07179487179 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9206467631 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.547539520022 98% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.8237302523 43.030603864 216% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 141.285714286 112.824112599 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8571428571 22.9334400587 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.23603664747 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 17.0 3.83414634146 443% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.160568110749 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924999165179 0.103423049105 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.082212398747 0.0843802449381 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0689028664977 0.15604864568 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622061545561 0.0819641961636 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.2329268293 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 61.2550243902 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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