Topic: in about 250-word essay expressing your opinion about the following topic:
“Technology has made the world a better place to live.”
You should use facts, examples, or logical reasons to support your opinion. Write it in about 40 minutes.
The twentieth century experienced the technological revolution. Undeniably, technology has changed our lives dramatically. In my opinion, Technology has made the world more and more developed, in the most positive direction.
Firstly, the advent of computers and the Internet has exploded the information age. People can connect with many people each other all over the world by many ways: Mail, Facebook and Skype. In addition, we can search and save the information, the knowledge or news from a huge and continuously updated data source.Furthermore, with the development of technology, the machinery is programmed and completely automated. These machines make it easier for humans to perform everything from the simplest to the most complicated of tasks, which involves high-precision, intensity or risks. For instance, goods are mass produced with high-precision, factories are controlled and operated by computer or exploration the universe by spacecraft .
Besides, technological advances have benefited our life with significant medical improvement. Heart now can successfully be transplanted into patients with specialized equipment. Many people suffering from diseases and illnesses have a higher chance of surviving.
However, opponents of this view say that technology has not made the world a better. They point out that artificial intelligence and machine will affect employment. Besides, they suppose that the environmental pollution is due to the impact of technology. To a certain extent, this is partly true. However, this tidy energy argument is unreasonable because human resources are irreplaceable with new discoveries in technology, many new jobs is being created. Moreover, sources of alternative energy can solve environmental problems such as solar energy, wind energy or tidal energy.
In conclusion, most of these changes contribute to making our life more convenient, comfortable and wonderful. Advantages of technology outweigh any disadvantages it brings to our lives. Therefore, I am of the opinion that technology has totally improved our lives, as long as we can apply the technology in appropriate uses and reduce any existing disadvantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 314, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Furthermore
...ge and continuously updated data source.Furthermore, with the development of technology, th...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...r exploration the universe by spacecraft . Besides, technological advances have ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, as to, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 6.8 221% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 5.60731707317 392% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 3.97073170732 353% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 965.302439024 193% => OK
No of words: 322.0 196.424390244 164% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.77329192547 4.92477711251 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 3.73543355544 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.36825316008 2.65546596893 127% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 106.607317073 189% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624223602484 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 283.868780488 211% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.45097560976 131% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 1.53170731707 457% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 8.94146341463 224% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0370958211 43.030603864 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.95 112.824112599 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1 22.9334400587 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 5.23603664747 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 3.70975609756 350% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0755026385471 0.215688989381 35% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0243820886727 0.103423049105 24% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.038532751559 0.0843802449381 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0488670614756 0.15604864568 31% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440459780958 0.0819641961636 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.86 61.2550243902 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.3012195122 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.89 11.4140731707 139% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.27 8.06136585366 127% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 40.7170731707 292% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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