The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

The two pie charts give information about the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.

It is clear that the percentage of electronics and appliance was by far highest during the research period. This figures of video games and food & beverage increased speedly from 2005 to 1010. However, the number of home funishings dropped dramatically.

In 2005, electronics and appliance had a highest percent, at 35%. After 5 years, it decrease to 30%, but it still a highest percent. By contrast, this figures of video games stood at 18% which a lowest number in 2005. Then, it rose noticeably to 23% in 2010.

Food & beverage, home funishings were similar in 2005, at 22% and 25% relatively. There was a dramatic change in the number of both sectors. Home funishings's percent jumped about 10% to 32%. In contrast, Food & beverage's percent fell to 15% at 2010.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, still, then, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 737.0 965.302439024 76% => OK
No of words: 150.0 196.424390244 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91333333333 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.49963551158 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67589394221 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.626666666667 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 207.0 283.868780488 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 22.4926829268 53% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.5179188895 43.030603864 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 61.4166666667 112.824112599 54% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.5 22.9334400587 55% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.16666666667 5.23603664747 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238833705208 0.215688989381 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833927543816 0.103423049105 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.19032708309 0.0843802449381 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212519104959 0.15604864568 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.287409855509 0.0819641961636 351% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.9 13.2329268293 60% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 61.2550243902 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.31 11.4140731707 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.9970731707 62% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.0658536585 63% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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