You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates aged 20 24 in one European country over a two year period Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making com

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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of unemployed graduates, aged 20-24, in one European country over a two-year period.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

The given horizontal multiple-bar graph depicts the unemployment rate of graduates in their early twenties in percentage at January, April, July and October 2008 and 2009. The X-axis represents the months years and the Y-axis represents the reported percentage. The blue bars indicate the data from male graduates and the orange bars indicate the same from the female ones.

In 2008, the unemployement of both gender was equal to or lower than 10% in January, April and July of 2008. However, for some reason the rates spiked in October of 2008. At least 16% of male graduates and about 11% of the female ones were without any work at that time.

The scene became more drastic in 2009. More than 10% male freshers failed to find work in January, April and July of 2009. On the contrary, less than 10% women did not find any livlihood that time. Similarly to the October of previous year, 22% of men and 14% of women remained jobless in October of 2009

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 263, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...xis represents the reported percentage. The blue bars indicate the data from male g...
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Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... from male graduates and the orange bars indicate the same from the female ones. ...
^^
Line 5, column 199, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...n did not find any livlihood that time. Similarly to the October of previous year, 22% of...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, similarly, so, at least, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 790.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 168.0 196.424390244 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70238095238 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60020574368 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37544004755 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 93.0 106.607317073 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553571428571 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.7474443477 43.030603864 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8 22.9334400587 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9 5.23603664747 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0857158788296 0.215688989381 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0310174460688 0.103423049105 30% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0306086346212 0.0843802449381 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0600365567444 0.15604864568 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0421697253095 0.0819641961636 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.2329268293 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.3012195122 70% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.68 11.4140731707 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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