You should spend about 20 minutes on this task The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features a

Essay topics:

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of the honey bee.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram illustrated of life circle of bees.In detailed, according to diagram be able to see how start of bees life for 34- 36 days.

First of all, life cycle commence with as a eggs for each bee.When eggs of bees are ready to new world it took 9 - 10 days.After this time short time, cracking is start for each eggs. However, it's not happing suddenly.Cracking took time almost 5 days.End of the this slowly born finally new babys came out the real life.

The epoch time of younger is not lasting too much.Approximately, 16 days later each member of bees become an as an adult in their life period.Maturity times just following the young adults periods.Just in 4days they became completely mature.

Finally, after they can be mature and ready for make new babys for the life of bees.Female bees can lay 1 or 2 eggs every three days.And each member of bee have to experience in this circle.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...gram illustrated of life circle of bees.In detailed, according to diagram be able ...
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Line 3, column 43, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...rst of all, life cycle commence with as a eggs for each bee.When eggs of bees are...
^
Line 3, column 43, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a egg' or simply 'eggs'?
Suggestion: a egg; eggs
...rst of all, life cycle commence with as a eggs for each bee.When eggs of bees are read...
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Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: When
...le commence with as a eggs for each bee.When eggs of bees are ready to new world it ...
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Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...le commence with as a eggs for each bee.When eggs of bees are ready to new world it ...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: After
... ready to new world it took 9 - 10 days.After this time short time, cracking is start...
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Line 3, column 194, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...acking is start for each eggs. However, its not happing suddenly.Cracking took time...
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Cracking
...eggs. However, its not happing suddenly.Cracking took time almost 5 days.End of the this...
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Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: End
...ddenly.Cracking took time almost 5 days.End of the this slowly born finally new bab...
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Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...Cracking took time almost 5 days.End of the this slowly born finally new babys came out ...
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Line 5, column 51, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Approximately
...time of younger is not lasting too much.Approximately, 16 days later each member of bees beco...
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Line 5, column 143, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Maturity
...ome an as an adult in their life period.Maturity times just following the young adults p...
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Line 5, column 198, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Just
...just following the young adults periods.Just in 4days they became completely mature....
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Line 7, column 85, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Female
...for make new babys for the life of bees.Female bees can lay 1 or 2 eggs every three da...
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Line 7, column 134, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...es can lay 1 or 2 eggs every three days.And each member of bee have to experience i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 741.0 965.302439024 77% => OK
No of words: 160.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.63125 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80873108947 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.66875 0.547539520022 122% => OK
syllable_count: 224.1 283.868780488 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.4926829268 142% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 39.3598780486 43.030603864 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.2 112.824112599 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 22.9334400587 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.23603664747 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 1.69756097561 884% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128326502984 0.215688989381 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769235681874 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368685465238 0.0843802449381 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0840399887469 0.15604864568 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343873948599 0.0819641961636 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.2329268293 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.3012195122 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.17 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.9970731707 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.