You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The following bar chart gives statistics showing the aspects of quality of life in five countries.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
The following chart illustrates four main indicators that determined the quality of life of people in five different countries in 1982. Overall what stands out from the chart is that the USA had higher standard of living compared to the rest.
To begin, the USA, the developed country, constituted the highest GNP at 13160 per head, whereas infant mortality rate was the lowest at 12 per 1000 live birth as opposed to the remaining nations. In addition, daily calorie supply and life expectancy were markedly higher than others. The range of scales of Bolivia, Egypt and Indonesia were quite similar. Egypt topped the lists among the three measures with the exception on infant mortality rate at 97 that was considerably lower than the Bolivia at 124.
Turning to Bangladesh, the developing country recorded the lowest quality of life. Regarding GNP, it was noted one hundred times smaller than the USA'S. Its calorie requirement was approximately a half of the USA. However, infant mortality ratio was 10 times greater than the industrialised state.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
Don't make math in IELTS writing. The examiners are not smart as we think. Maximum we use 'double', 'triple', 'half'.
'Regarding GNP, it was noted one hundred times smaller than the USA'S. '
'However, infant mortality ratio was 10 times greater than the industrialised state.'
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 173 200
No. of Characters: 858 1000
No. of Different Words: 111 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.627 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.96 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.615 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 61 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 47 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 28 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.284 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.388 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.588 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.054 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, regarding, whereas, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 884.0 965.302439024 92% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13953488372 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64191573804 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.662790697674 0.547539520022 121% => OK
syllable_count: 273.6 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3274727028 43.030603864 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.4 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.23603664747 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.065033648335 0.215688989381 30% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0296653233755 0.103423049105 29% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523024807278 0.0843802449381 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0573431285241 0.15604864568 37% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554456176018 0.0819641961636 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 11.4140731707 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.06136585366 118% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 40.7170731707 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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