21.09.2017 You have travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company.
Write to the airline and explain what happened.
Describe your suitcase and tell them what was in it.
Find out what they are going to do about it.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to make a complaint.
On 1st March 2017 I flew by your airline from Berlin to Los Angeles. With me I had a hand bag that was taken with me on board and a piece of luggage that was hand over to an airport employee. When the aircraft landed in Los Angeles, I learn that the baggage was mistakenly sent to Moscow. I immediately wrote e-mail to the administration of New York airport but their answer claim that workers of your company are responsible for the mistake.
The lost suitcase was made of black leather and had a golden handle with two snake heads carved on it. It is quite a big suitcase and I put in it my new photo camera with two spare lenses, a laptop with a charger, several flesh sticks with important documents from work and some spare clothes such as shirts, a pair of trouser and several ties.
I would prefer that your personnel took this problematic situation very seriously. If it is plausible, perhaps, the security service of your firm may try to track my bag. If there is no advancement till 1th April 2017, your employer should pay a full price of all the lost possessions. Additionally, I deem that there is a need for paying a moral compensation for the troubles your airline has created for me. The amount of money would be discussed if there are no results.
if you need any additional information, please contact me and I will provide you with all needed data.
I am waiting for your prompt response.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk
Comments
Essay evaluation report
With me I had a hand bag that was taken with me on board //'with me' repeated
There is a hand bag with me on board
a piece of luggage that was hand over to an airport employee.
a piece of luggage that was handed over to an airport employee.
When the aircraft landed in Los Angeles, I learn that the baggage was mistakenly sent to Moscow.
When the aircraft landed in Los Angeles, I learned that the baggage was mistakenly sent to Moscow.
I immediately wrote e-mail
I immediately wrote an e-mail
but their answer claim that
but their answers claim that
flaws:
1. No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2 //Double check grammar issues after essay writing.
2. Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => maybe 'that' is over used
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 273 250
No. of Characters: 1193 1200
No. of Different Words: 171 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.065 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.37 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.492 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 75 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 54 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 29 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.164 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.302 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.687 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.051 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Dear Sir,
Dear Sir,
I have a problem with task 1 due to I do not understand how to write it.
Sometimes I guess correctly, and sometimes not.
The biggest question is the beginning.:
-what should I write about this? "Write to the airline and explain what happened?"
- How to stay within the topic?
Thank you.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...e discussed if there are no results. if you need any additional information, pl...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 5.05154639175 158% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1250.0 937.175257732 133% => OK
No of words: 273.0 206.0 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57875457875 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 3.78020617076 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59037819084 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 127.690721649 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622710622711 0.622605031667 100% => OK
syllable_count: 375.3 290.88556701 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.83505154639 218% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 12.6804123711 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6704696531 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3333333333 76.5299724578 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.66666666667 4.34317383033 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.29896907216 140% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.49484536082 468% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178759232084 0.216113520407 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542142598673 0.0766984524023 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381383468626 0.0603063233224 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0777334659457 0.12726935374 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0283402674669 0.0580467560999 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 8.37731958763 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 70.7449484536 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 7.45979381443 106% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 41.2886597938 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 8.62886597938 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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