22/09/2017Write a letter to a friend to ask for his/her help to collect money for a charity organization. The letter needs to cover the following details.
- why do you want to collect money for the charity organization?
- Ask your friend to help
- explain in detail how your friend can help.
Dear John,
I am writing to ask you about a favor.
As you know I am a volunteer in a charitable organization. Currently I work as a doctor in a poor country that is located on a Caribbean island. Recently a severe hurricane hit the region, and now when it moved north, the size of the damage has become apparent. A large number of buildings have been flattered or seriously damaged; the people lost almost all their possessions. This situation should be addressed.
I decided to ask you to collect some money for my organization in order to help the region. I know that you have a big hearth and a huge number of acquaintances in business, admiration and educational institutions all of that makes you a perfect candidate for the job.
Firstly, you have a large number of followers on your Facebook page and Instagram account, I would like to that you posted an open letter in which you would describe the essence of the problem and ask them to donate as much money as they could. Secondly, organizing a charity auction or party in a local university would be helpful. I have already contacted the local university and got a response from the head master of the institution that he agrees to provide you with a place and all needed equipment to set up the event. Your task is to give him a call and talk over details.
I am waiting for your prompt response,
Sincerely yours,
Eugene.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No serious flaws found
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 250 250
No. of Characters: 1106 1200
No. of Different Words: 149 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.976 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.424 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.66 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 75 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 53 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.625 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.424 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.188 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.67 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5
Dear Sir,
Dear Sir,
I have a problem with task 1 due to I do not understand how to write it.
Sometimes I guess correctly, and sometimes not.
The biggest question is the beginning.:
-what should I write about this? "why do you want to collect money for the charity organization?"
- How to stay within the topic?
-how to understand what is out of topic?
Thank you
You are just doing fine.
You are just doing fine.
The connection is:
Me --------- charity organization ------- damaged area
for any 'why....' question, do the same thing like what we told: give two reasons:
reason 1: The area is in a bad situation
reason 2: The charity organization wants to give help. for example, hold a program. while I am a volunteer in this charitable organization and decide to do something.
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For questions in task I, it is hard to write the essay out of topic. Just remember don't develop too much content for one question or think too much, since there are only 20 minutes left. Give two reason briefly according to the question.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...am writing to ask you about a favor. As you know I am a volunteer in a charitab...
^^
Line 5, column 263, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: Many; Numerous
...size of the damage has become apparent. A large number of buildings have been flattered or seriou...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 19, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...date for the job. Firstly, you have a large number of followers on your Facebook page and Ins...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, second, secondly, so, you know
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 5.05154639175 198% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 26.3917525773 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.85567010309 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1159.0 937.175257732 124% => OK
No of words: 250.0 206.0 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.636 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 3.78020617076 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75422293942 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 127.690721649 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596 0.622605031667 96% => OK
syllable_count: 371.7 290.88556701 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 16.3608247423 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1627968946 44.8134815571 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.1538461538 76.5299724578 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 16.8248392259 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.53846153846 4.34317383033 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 7.41237113402 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246797583824 0.216113520407 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752146064511 0.0766984524023 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0912188290738 0.0603063233224 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131193393219 0.12726935374 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0782911690496 0.0580467560999 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 8.37731958763 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 70.7449484536 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 8.71597938144 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 7.59969072165 112% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 41.2886597938 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 8.54432989691 112% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.8426966292 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.75 Out of 9
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