In June 1996, an experimental flu vaccine was trialled in a large country town on females only. SUmmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

In June 1996, an experimental flu vaccine was trialled in a large country town on females only. SUmmarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The presented bar chart illustrates the number of people who died of flu from March to August, include males and females. The line chart demonstrates flu rates for women and men during the eleven months. However, the pie chart shows the number of females recipients of new vaccine classified into 4 groups.
Overall, more female got an affected by an epidemic than male and female deaths rate from this epidemic was more than male counterparts.
In term of bar chart, from March to May there was no data given for male died of flu, whereas the number of death who was female were 1. In the period from June to August, it experienced an significant increase in its number that 4 female deaths and 2 male deaths.
According to the second pie chart, the total of female recipients of new vaccine who were over 65 years old made up 35%, followed by babies or children with 24%, only 13% were hospitalizer. Meanwhile, the figure of people not given the vaccine account for 28%.
In the third line chart, it saw a sharp growth in the new cases of flu for 5 months (from Feb to Jun). There were just under 1000 cases that the sick people were females in March, reaching at peak in Jun (at 3500 cases), more than 1000 cases of males. After that, the number of cases dropped slowly to about 3000 in Jul, before levelling off at 2500 for the rest of the year. For males, the figures were lower but showed a similar trend throughout the epidemic.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
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Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...for 5 months from Feb to Jun. There were just under 1000 cases that the sick peop...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, second, third, whereas, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 32.9175257732 21% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 26.3917525773 186% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.85567010309 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1176.0 937.175257732 125% => OK
No of words: 262.0 206.0 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48854961832 4.54256449028 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.26898686224 2.54303337028 89% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 127.690721649 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553435114504 0.622605031667 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 355.5 290.88556701 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 0.824742268041 849% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 1.44329896907 485% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 16.3608247423 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 31.605533095 44.8134815571 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 76.5299724578 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8333333333 16.8248392259 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 4.34317383033 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110965197483 0.216113520407 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455446100849 0.0766984524023 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0342944567926 0.0603063233224 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0727627669731 0.12726935374 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353360198629 0.0580467560999 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 8.37731958763 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 70.7449484536 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 8.71597938144 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 7.59969072165 96% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 8.54432989691 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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