The line chart indicates the amount of fast food consumed by young people less 18 years old in Australia between 1975 and 2000, a the period 25 years.

Essay topics:

The line chart indicates the amount of fast food consumed by young people less 18 years old in Australia between 1975 and 2000, a the period 25 years.

The line chart indicates the amount of fast food consumed by young people less 18 years old in Australia between 1975 and 2000, a the period 25 years.
It can be clearly seen that there was a suddenly upward movement in the number of fast food consumed by teenagers in Australia from 1975 to 2000. In particular, the quantity of hamburgers reached the highest point of consumption by teenagers who lived in Australia while fish and chips experienced the lowest figure.
The year 1985 was the period having a slow decrease to 90 times about fish and chips eaten by Australian teenagers compared to 1975.The most significant feature is that consumption of the number fish and chips by young people in Australia dropped dramatically approximately 40 times during the end of period.
In sharp contrast to this, teenagers ate the two other fast foods at much higher levels. Australia was the country that had 10 times consumed pizza by people aged 7 to 15 in 1975. It is noticeable that the consumption of pizza grew under 40 times over the next 1 years and then plateaued at 82 times per year in 2000.The biggest rise was seen in hamburgers, there was a sudden growth in the quantity of hamburgers consumed by teenagers in 1985, which was followed by a dramatic rise in the year 2000.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, then, while, in particular

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.03092783505 198% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 32.9175257732 21% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 26.3917525773 159% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1061.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 225.0 206.0 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71555555556 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87298334621 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63224450063 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 119.0 127.690721649 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528888888889 0.622605031667 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 305.1 290.88556701 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.13402061856 22% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 0.824742268041 728% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 1.44329896907 139% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 16.3608247423 196% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.6299345939 44.8134815571 198% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.571428571 76.5299724578 198% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1428571429 16.8248392259 191% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.28571428571 4.34317383033 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.41237113402 40% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426155039483 0.216113520407 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.239785524005 0.0766984524023 313% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.314564255724 0.0603063233224 522% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.361330662457 0.12726935374 284% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.368834421883 0.0580467560999 635% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 8.37731958763 202% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 70.7449484536 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 7.45979381443 180% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 8.71597938144 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 8.54432989691 173% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 8.15463917526 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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