You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference from someone who knew you when you were at school. Write a letter to one of your old teachers asking for a reference. in your letter•Say what job you have applied for.•explain why you want this

Essay topics:

You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference from someone who knew you when you were at school. Write a letter to one of your old teachers asking for a reference. in your letter
• Say what job you have applied for.
• explain why you want this job.
• Suggest what information the teacher should include.

Dear Sir,
As you may know, I graduated last year and I am seeking for an appropriate job right now. The office where I applied for, has asked me to provide a letter of recommendation. I was wondering if you could help me with that.
When I graduated from collage I tried to find a position based on my major. therefore, I decided to apply for a job in a well-known telecommunication company. it is one of the main network operators in the country with many different branches though all over the country. I would really like to be hired by this company because of the high salary rate and other benefits that the position would offer. Moreover, it is a nine to five job so I could have some quality time with my family.
The human resource department has sent me an email containing specific template for the letter of reference. I would be happy if you kindly consider it in your letter. Teamwork, moral behavior and final grades should be included in this letter.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Your faithfully,
Payam Esmaeilpour

Votes
Average: 8.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 223, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ndering if you could help me with that. When I graduated from collage I tried to fin...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 76, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...d to find a position based on my major. therefore, I decided to apply for a job in a well...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...a well-known telecommunication company. it is one of the main network operators in...
^^
Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...n network operators in the country with many different branches though all over the country. I...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'job' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'jobs'.
Suggestion: jobs
...d offer. Moreover, it is a nine to five job so I could have some quality time with ...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 32.9175257732 88% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.85567010309 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 867.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 188.0 206.0 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61170212766 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78363317017 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 127.690721649 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.659574468085 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 276.3 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.13402061856 99% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.360824742268 277% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.4426782898 44.8134815571 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.6923076923 76.5299724578 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4615384615 16.8248392259 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 4.34317383033 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 2.54639175258 196% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.94845360825 203% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364744271113 0.216113520407 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112587511494 0.0766984524023 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741082816987 0.0603063233224 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208013913498 0.12726935374 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755456503798 0.0580467560999 130% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 8.37731958763 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 8.71597938144 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 7.59969072165 110% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 41.2886597938 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 8.62886597938 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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