You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Essay topics:

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Dear Anna,

It's so glad to receive your letter for asking for advice about getting a job or going to colleage.

For my opinion, I would suggest you get a job first, and you will learn variety of knowleage from your work in the society. If you deemed your abilities of work is inadequate , you could study specific classes, joining clubs, training courses from the government centers or the community institutes after working. In an university professionals or experts can teach you theories of specific fields but no practice, these 4-years education experiences ultimately are for directing you how to get your job, so It would be better choice if you can learn it from reality society than the school.

I know your interests is in coding webpages and also you had experiences as volunteers for maintaining their multi-systems servers in local communities, I would recommend you persuade the job. In addition to that is releated Science Engineer, there are many opportunities in downtown of Victoria.

Whatever you choose the type of your life, If you need me to check your resume or CV, please feel free to contact with me through email.

Good luck for you!

Sincerely,
Sandy

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...med your abilities of work is inadequate , you could study specific classes, joini...
^^
Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...community institutes after working. In an university professionals or experts can...
^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'so', 'in addition']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.236363636364 0.220444632235 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.168181818182 0.167888034529 100% => OK
Adjectives: 0.05 0.0606518309736 82% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0227272727273 0.0506257000042 45% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.131818181818 0.118615021944 111% => OK
Prepositions: 0.136363636364 0.107062808482 127% => OK
Participles: 0.0454545454545 0.041066498444 111% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75688229709 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0272727272727 0.0385302599488 71% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00132118243153 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0545454545455 0.0714148451538 76% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0318181818182 0.0191574576366 166% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00909090909091 0.00930345855455 98% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1193.0 1141.60824742 105% => OK
No of words: 200.0 206.134020619 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.965 5.53046319177 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.78085437643 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.345 0.284621296913 121% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.275 0.211203875043 130% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.195 0.133321485273 146% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.125 0.0843313296314 148% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75688229709 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 127.690721649 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.67 0.622163163488 108% => OK
Word variations: 72.7137171611 62.8969750728 116% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 12.9587628866 69% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2222222222 16.4300151701 135% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.4460182404 44.7399317507 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.555555556 90.9928171075 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 16.4300151701 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.666666666667 0.613754768223 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.09278350515 96% => OK
Readability: 49.7222222222 37.5504026743 132% => OK
Elegance: 1.29577464789 1.13073093955 115% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337640128912 0.331212695627 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108337696207 0.0927372745006 117% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0614034313864 0.0736520305886 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.769679700568 0.579516596996 133% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.16174905885 0.180689518051 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149569641371 0.122183219658 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933770489081 0.0765303033291 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.178805290258 0.211926503985 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0712237625281 0.0737400523855 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226511250353 0.203819188451 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.088626332473 0.067151250289 132% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.45360824742 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.48453608247 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.0206185567 25% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 5.0 4.73195876289 106% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 1.03092783505 97% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.56701030928 39% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 8.32989690722 84% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

assessment:
It's so glad to --> I'm so glad(I'm shows more authority than It's)

For my opinion--> In my opinion
In an university professionals or experts can----> University professionals or experts can( 'In an' should remove as it only make the sentence sound obscure)

but no(not) practice,( the sentence is a run-on sentence. i think you should consider putting a period or semicolon here since the next clause is independent clause) these 4-years education experiences ultimately are for directing you how to get your job, so It would be better choice if you can learn it from reality society than the school.

I know your interests is(are) in coding webpages(consider putting comma here because the next clause is an independent clause) and also you had experiences as volunteers(volunteer) for maintaining their(antecedent, specific noun, should be mentioned first before using the pronoun 'their' ) multi-systems servers in local communities, I would recommend you persuade(maybe 'pursue'?) the job. In addition to that is releated('related' or just remove this word) Science Engineer(science engineering course),(consider putting transitional word or just put peiod and remove comma) there are many opportunities in downtown of Victoria.

Whatever you choose the type of your life( suggestion: ... choose the type of career,), If you need me to check your resume or CV, please feel free to contact with(i think the word 'with' is no longer necessary) me through email.

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these are only my personal observations and suggestions. I may commit mistakes here, but i wish it helps in some way.

Jen