You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realized there were some problems with the job.Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter:-- explain why you took the job-- describe the problems that

Essay topics:

You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realized there were some problems with the job.

Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter:

-- explain why you took the job
-- describe the problems that you experienced
-- suggest what could be done about them.

Dear Mr James,

I'm writing to thank again for giving me the opportunity to work in your company and ask you to help me in some problems which I have had over last several weeks with my job.

As you know I have been working as a cost-benefit analyst in the project management office from 20th September three days per week. Recently our office head has wanted me to work four days per week which is against our work contract. However; I would like to work in your company whole of the week as it causes me to earn more money and I would find more valuable experience, It would be conflicting with my education program as I need to go to my courses in Wednesdays and Fridays.

Also, the office head had promised me to allocate a desktop computer for analyzing project data which is still not performed. In fact, I am using my own laptop to work with the Preamovera Software and I am always worried about losing project data if some technical problems come to existence.

I hope that these not make you any difficulties and you would allow me to work according to our primary work contract and would provide a desktop computer.

I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.

Yours faithfully

Milad Rahimi

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
Dear Mr James, Im writing to thank again for giving me th...
^^
Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...eek which is against our work contract. However; I would like to work in your company w...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, look, so, still, in fact, you know

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 32.9175257732 103% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 26.3917525773 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1012.0 937.175257732 108% => OK
No of words: 222.0 206.0 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55855855856 4.54256449028 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8600083453 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49005814767 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 127.690721649 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581081081081 0.622605031667 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 314.1 290.88556701 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.13402061856 66% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.9744216153 44.8134815571 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.444444444 76.5299724578 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 16.8248392259 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 4.34317383033 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191181832295 0.216113520407 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079230848001 0.0766984524023 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0522812540967 0.0603063233224 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114230671757 0.12726935374 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0508218727736 0.0580467560999 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 8.37731958763 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 70.7449484536 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 7.45979381443 138% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 8.71597938144 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.