You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you fell.Write a letter to the singer. In your letterSay how you fell about his performanceGive details of your musical activitiesExplain how you would l

Essay topics:

You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you fell.

Write a letter to the singer. In your letter

Say how you fell about his performance

Give details of your musical activities

Explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities.

Dear Mr.Simon

I’m writing to you about your last concert at Istanbul. It was a perfect concert for me and I hope for the others fans.I knew you almost five years. Always, when I was a in the car or going to occupation listen to your music. Your songs are feeling to me alike my childhood times. Due in your last concert, my memories from my past becoming like a fairytale. Perhaps, you don’t know but also I’m musician too. Moreover, I have being writing lyrics almost 3 years as a professional composer. Unfortunately, I unable to share to this songs because i thought they are not enough for release. However, secondly I’m writing you because I be able to assist you about this issue. I read on internet about your charity concert for orphans. I just want to help to this poor kids. Please read my song just for goodness. I will be there your next concert as a volunteer.

I’m waiting your answers about my request.

Your sincerely

Votes
Average: 7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Simon
Dear Mr.Simon I'm writing to you about your...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...t for me and I hope for the others fans.I knew you almost five years. Always, whe...
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Line 5, column 155, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[1]
Message: The adverb 'Always' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
...hers fans.I knew you almost five years. Always, when I was a in the car or going to oc...
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Line 5, column 174, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...u almost five years. Always, when I was a in the car or going to occupation liste...
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Line 5, column 543, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...er. Unfortunately, I unable to share to this songs because i thought they are not en...
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Line 5, column 562, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...I unable to share to this songs because i thought they are not enough for release...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, moreover, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 4.92783505155 20% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 32.9175257732 115% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 26.3917525773 76% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 802.0 937.175257732 86% => OK
No of words: 170.0 206.0 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71764705882 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61087313685 3.78020617076 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56635807549 2.54303337028 101% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 127.690721649 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.617647058824 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 242.1 290.88556701 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.13402061856 131% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 16.3608247423 73% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.729911766 44.8134815571 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 57.2857142857 76.5299724578 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.1428571429 16.8248392259 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 4.34317383033 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.94845360825 152% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239714398342 0.216113520407 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830378979458 0.0766984524023 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618530047527 0.0603063233224 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157255903447 0.12726935374 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0801532948813 0.0580467560999 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 8.37731958763 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 70.7449484536 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 7.45979381443 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 7.59969072165 101% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 41.2886597938 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.8 8.54432989691 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 8.15463917526 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.2247191011 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.25 Out of 9
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