Information technology is changing many aspects of ourlives and now is dominating our home, leisure and work. To what extend do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages. -Syerapke- (rewrite)
Information technology (IT) nowadays likes nuclear explosion which influences all parts of live including home, leisure, and work. People and IT are unity. Obviously, this unity is caused benefit from the IT usage and helpful enough for people activities. Thereby, this view raises some thoughts to believe that IT merits are valuable than the demerits while the other groups stand in the opposite.
To begin with, the growth of technology is marked as a gift for all of society. Parts of our work are vastly done because of technology. As an illustration, in educational field scholars are easily learnt and also investigate about their research easily as the contribution of technology. IT altered manual writing and material finding easier with clicking and pressing keyboard button on a computer. Moreover, IT features also take part in planning holiday. Travelers may find information before traveling embodies, weather condition, local culture, or culinary pattern easily from numerous websites as a consideration for plan their vacation well. For example, destination place is in winter so they can prepare appropriate wardrobe to face the weather and most of these features serve for free.
Nevertheless, IT also brings drawbacks as make people dependent and selfish. Become common nowadays even child, teen, and also adult have depended on smart phone. Accessing social media or entertainment features raise addiction among them and also weaken socialization skill. For instance, most of teens can facebook-ing while listening or twitter-ing in the term of family gathering. It decreased their social skill whether they just monotony aware with a screen.
People and IT are unity.
People and IT are united.
Sentence: Obviously, this unity is caused benefit from the IT usage and helpful enough for people activities.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to people and activities
and material finding easier with clicking and pressing keyboard button on a computer.
Description: what is the verb for this sentence?
as a consideration for plan their vacation well.
as a consideration for planning their vacation well.
Sentence: Nevertheless, IT also brings drawbacks as make people dependent and selfish.
Description: A conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to as and make
most of teens can facebook-ing
most of teens can be facebook-ing
Sentence: It decreased their social skill whether they just monotony aware with a screen.
Description: The fragment It decreased is not usually followed by their
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace their with there
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to monotony and aware
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 258 350
No. of Characters: 1371 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.008 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.314 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.731 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 80 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.765 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.28 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.448 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.055 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5